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Muadib

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I am an aspiring author with some fresh new ideas. Having a completed manuscript I am exploring my options for publishing while I am revising it and thinking about the next one.

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Lord of the Ring Series
Narnia Series
River God

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God of the Slaves - Bringer of....

Kristofer Ryan Murray

Four friends are in a war between their Egyptian gods and a foreign god and must choose whether to join the God of the Slaves.


The hot desert sun scorches down upon the grand city of the white walls in the most civilized nation in the world, Egypt. This is both the blessing and hardship from Ammon-Ra. Anuket, goddess of the Nile, bestows water and life to the city and soothes this hardship. Every year, she embraces the fields which causes them to produce bountifully. All of the gods have their own place in society, and life goes on.

However, a disturbance appears. At first it is laughable, but soon it strikes at the very core of Egypt. An unknown and foriegn god declares war on Pharaoh and the rest of the gods who prove powerless before it. Four friends find themselves shaken to their foundations and don't know what to believe. Do they cling to the old familiar gods, or do they turn their backs on it all and join the God of the Slaves.

 

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I wrote 483 days ago

Thanks for the comments. I've finished editing the first 3 chapters to address the flow and mechanical storytelling issues. I would appreciate more feedback on it, so please let me know. view book

I wrote 493 days ago

Ideas to make it better: - I find this phrase confusing "He brought a picture of her to show him, to see if he would remember". Who is he showing the picture to? himself? [Edit: I figured out this meant show it to the captain. Maybe reword it so it's a little less confusing to a new reader] - "Com... view book

I wrote 494 days ago

J, Overall I like the story. It is very well written and draws me in immediately. Just a few things: - The quotation at the beginning is somewhat esoteric. I don't know what it means or why it's there - "yelled one as he approached a hooded figure, which did not react" > maybe change 'a hooded' ... view book

I wrote 495 days ago

Thanks, I appreciate all of the positive feedback. I am also looking for ways I can make my book better. So if you want to comment about anything that can be improved upon, maybe you want something described more or some of the detail slows things down too much, then please post and let me know. view book

I wrote 496 days ago

I uploaded the first three chapters to the book. The book is 15 chapters in total and about 105k words. I am planning to turn this into a trilogy and chronicle the character's journey with the Hebrew people in two more books, God of the Slaves - Path to Peace, and God of the Slaves - Rise to Power. ... view book

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