hi there jane, thanks for the invite to read. i think your story sounds interesting. question - the pitch you have on authonomy, is that the one you used in your query letter to agents and editors? if so, it needs some work. first off, there are a lot of details that aren't necessary, and the... view book

before i leave a full crit - can i ask who your intended audience is? and what time period is this? the dialog seems wooden/formal/unrealistic unless you are trying to pull off a Max Lucado type of thing. however, the narrative is beautiful. i especially like the first line "autumn unfurling her... view book

kevin, i find it interesting that you cut my comment to suit your needs. here's the original. uneditied. thanks for the invite to read - and happy new year! first i will say your prologue was fantastic. but why oh why must writers create prologues? if you ask yourself that question you wi... view book

out of curiosity, have you started querying yet? i wouldn't wait. good stuff. view book

RC thanks for the invite to read and THAT'S what I'm talkin' 'bout! great hook! i'm coming back to this when i have more time....but based on your premise it sounds vaguely similiar to Prophecy of the Sisters by Michelle Zinc. if you haven't read it yet, i would. wl and i promise i'll retur... view book