Great Stuff David, Good plot,dialogue, characterisation and a fast paced easy to read and moving plot. These are the characteristics which make the reader want to come back to a book and to achieve the authors holy grail... ' I could not put it down' Much of what you have here ticks all of th... view book

Hi Colin, Good read so far, but I would take a look at the third paragraph of your main pitch; not sure 'previously planned' is relevant. Just a little tightening up as the pitch is your key selling point. The opening chapters show promise, although I would look to reduce the lengthy sentence... view book

Hi Colin, Good read so far, but I would take a look at the third paragraph of your main pitch; not sure 'previously planned' is relevant. Just a little tightening up as the pitch is your key selling point. The opening chapters show promise, although I would look to reduce the lengthy sentence... view book

Hi Bradley, First Class! The world you have created is bleak and yet is probably not too far removed from where we are right now. Your characterisation and vivid description set the story up well in the first chapter and then the story moves on at a pace and there is plenty there to keep you r... view book

Hi Doug, This has the potrntial to be a great story, wih an intersting premise. Your pitch is let down badly in my opinion by your personal commentary on the quality of the read and not the story which will unfold within. This is a very cleverly woven story and you do well to convey the emotion a... view book