A stunning thriller with all the right ingredients - dialogue, pace, action, story, characters. Shelved view book

I think the first two paragraphs are superfluous. Otherwise, it is a gentle start, with an interesting premise. Backed view book

Jared I love characters in mental hospitals so this is cool. I think the opening four paras give away too much. Keep your cards to your chest... start with para four, Marcus... then slowly reveal the fact that he has killed his father etc. Way way above the normal authonomy standard. I am a FAN view book

Freddie A truly powerful story, excellently told - no doubt you can write. It is so well written it reads like a screenplay. And that is also the problem... the present-tense delivery. I think you may make things more difficult than necessary (in terms of commercial appeal) for yourself by the use ... view book

Traci Here are my comments after a 15 minute read. No doubt you can write very well - it's edgy, well-paced and sharp. Crit: I think the characters should be referred to, at least initially, by both first and second names, rather than just "Jack" etc. Why? It's part of their character, and (it's... view book