I'm no expert on Chidrens fiction, but was very impressed with this. The chapters were short and snappy, and although I'd only intended to scan through the first few, I ended up reading them all. Ten thousand words I imagine is probably about right for a childrens book; big enough without being so ... view book

Excellent. I had my doubts when I started, especially when the principal character found Christmas boring, but warmed up to him as January ended & February began. It was a little slow to begin with, but once it got going it accelerated and I was intrigued. I thought the Diary format worked very well... view book

I thought this started very well. I don't usually like a preface in a novel, but this time it worked very well, drawing the readers attention into the book and making them want to read more. Chapter One also started very well, with subtle hints, such as the six fingers, the 25mph spped limit, and I... view book

I was quite impressed with this, although it's not the sort of book I would normally read. I shouldn't be surprised if it's on 120 bookshelves. The introduction was good enough to draw a reader in easily. The sentences were short and punchy, making it very easy to read. There is a very brave to atte... view book

This is very good. The beginning was traumatic, but that's good in that it draws the reader into the story. I can't think of anything to add that might improve it. Good Luck for the future. With a story as good, and as harrowing as this I'm sure that you'll get it republished soon. I think there's a... view book