Interesting. The events are certainly horrifying and gripping. And the writing is very polished. After eight chapters, I had a few reservations though. You handle the omnipotent point of view extremely well. I had to get used to the head hopping though in the beginning chapters. Also your narr... view book

Interesting. I found the first chapter overbearing. The relationship between Eli and Ayane was nicely shown. Descriptions are entirely lacking. In three chapters, you have not shown setting. What do people look like? What era are we in? What is the culture like? what do people eat? ... view book

You have a lively style and a rich setting. You plunge the reader into a whole new world. Da and Mum are already engrossing. The narrator is already looking to be likable. However, I do think the writing leaves much to be desired. The first paragraph reads convoluted to me. You used "so col... view book

Ok.the book does read well and smooth. I did enjoy the philosophical bent of the book. However in the end, I found the book to be unsatisfying thematically. Ed was sympathetic for the most part, but still unlikable. My sympathy waned in the end. His passivity wasn't to my liking. There we... view book

Ok. I bow before your wordsmithing. Very nice. Excuse me, if I go back now to cry over my lame imitations of writing. I would have to read a little more closely to you know, get to the heart of the story and such. I'll be back. thanks for putting this up here. view book