There's nothing like a good ghost story/mystery. I couldn't keep myself from reading the chapters posted. I did notice that it needs a concerted proofreading, but it didn't prevent me from enjoying the story. As a former police officer I would make one point: it would be contrary to the standard ope... view book

I turned to this book after seeing Mr. Stumpo's name on a friends blog. I am so glad that I did. Hilarious and well-written. The characters live and breathe. I hope this gets to the ED and hits the bookshelves eventually. Shelved and starred. Might I prevail upon you to read Kailai and the Dragon P... view book

The short pitch grabbed my attention. I was intrigued by the concept and dove into the first chapter. While I understand the need to develope the scene and Jerusha's circumstances, the gap between the opening comment and the remainder of the dialogue was far too long and the story stalled. Jerusha... view book

I like the premise and the storyline appears to be well thought out. Since Anne Rice, Stephen King, and the Twilight series, it has become more difficult to create an original vampire tale, but I feel you are on your way to achieving that goal. I must, however, concur with the critiques of Aidan2002... view book

I like the beginning of this manuscript. The reader is immediately immersed in a dangerous mystery that grabs at one's emotions. I concur with an earlier reviewer who commented that an excess of descriptive prose inhibits what should be a fast paced tale. I would also add that you should limit the u... view book