One of the better books on the site. Pros.: Engrossing. Interesting writing style. Liked it. Lots of potential in the premise. Cons.: Way too many filter words, which weakens the pace for the reader. Lots of missing punctuation. Wonderful imagery, but would help if you could lead the reader alon... view book

Nice read, crisp writing. Just a thought about the title-given the tenor of the book, should it be titled 'The Other Face' - just my opinion. All the best view book

I like your style of writing-it is succint and economic and with just the right amount of laconic humour. Well done! view book

Read till chap 12, so I can tell you I went a long way. Skilled writing, taut pace, conversational dialogue. Not much to nitpick, honestly. BTW, I wouldn't used the word 'cold' so much in the beginning-it takes away the sheen from the writing. All the best view book

Very evocative writing that only partly does justice to the rather inviting pitch. The characters are alluring and the setting couldn't be better. However, as a reader, I noticed that most of your paras began with a character's name and at times it begins to jarr a bit. I read till chap 13 and I thi... view book