Nice first chapter S.C. - You've really broken into the a 3-d sensitivity by mixing family and friends into Terr'ys pre-death(life passing before your eyes) in chapter one. It's a great change and growth from last year when we met. Smart move too....instead of starting the focus of the story on a ... view book

Nanty, I think that you have a very cool premise in Chrys. It's very interesting to have an imaginary friend that is unfriendlyy and devilish and angry and actually not so imaginary. Very interestng to have a nerdy type of therapist and the aloof dad and the feaked out mom. Chrys is easy to be afr... view book

The Qualities of Wood A strangely enticing title, A "to the point" short-pitch and a well laid out -professional looking long pitch. I must read this entire work soon...but i have a feeling it will be in paperback sooner! -s view book

Your writing style is very personalized and flows nicely in a way I don't know how to really make better suggestions or critical improvements. There's a content balance about the elements and writing that flows without question. Good job rolling with your voice. -s view book

I think the last paragraph of your long pitch stalls it. You just got me interested in Joe, but the way the sarah introduction is hung on the end of that feels like a wall. I think I'd rather meet sarah later in the book...but for now in the long pitch...i'd rather think about "a shy girl from his ... view book