You create a very suspenseful first chapter with the 2 girls, sneaking away through feilds and open road. I really iked your descriptions and could actually visualize Africa. Some is lurking, yet you never say who. Got as far as the third chapter and hope to rturn to read on. J view book

Right from the very start one is drawn in to this young boy named Hamish. You feel sorry for this young lad who has lost his parents and dog. Uncle Jock is rigid and uncaring and you write this so well. I have a clear vision of who these characters are and the cold run down estate Hamish is forced t... view book

Love the cover and the short pitch, drew me right in. I'm not so sure that the long pitch works. I am by no means an expert but here are my thoughts. I like the first two lines. Start a new paragraph, leave out am back home, the nightmares.....Next sentence end it with for long- the next few words ... view book

Love the title, cover and short pitch, just not sure about the long one. Perhaps leave some pertinent info out and let the reader find out. I read the first chapter and the writing is smooth,very entertaining.To me Rueben is real to life character. Highly starred. Damn just realized I can't trust m... view book

When I first glanced at the cover I immediately thought it was a children's book. Reading the pitch it isn't so. I read the first chapter and did enjoy the read. However, I did find the repetetion of Marquis of Queensbury a little bothersome, perhaps use the word bar or pub. I did like all the colo... view book