Hiya I've readthe prolouge and the first two chapters. There's a few little things but I see they've already been pointed out by others. I love angel stories, even if people say they're not that original, but there's a lot that can be done with them. I like the fact that it's from a male POV, I've... view book

Hey, I've read through again. I had to go backa nd find my old comment to compare to, and it's even better now than it was then. I liked the new chapter and setting up the lady in white. It's good to come back a reread and see how you've improved, I wish more people would tell me when tthey do upd... view book

Hi I got to this a lot faster than I though, my WL was a lot shorter than I though. So, this is a pretty good start. You do a great job of hinting at something weird going on, especially the thing with the fish. It made me smile so that's a good thing. There's not been a lot with mermaids recently,... view book

Well, as I said, I've gone through and read it all. You've got a good cast of main characters, they're defined and seem pretty well thought out given the situations they're in. There are a few places where you use 'we'll' instead of 'well' or the other way, at that's a little distracting sometimes.... view book

Wow, this just has me begging for more. I'm so hooked, I'm going to say something I don't say very often, considering how backed up my WL is. I'm going to make time to come back a read the rest in the morning so I can give you a better comment. I love post apocalyptic stuff and you've ovbiously rese... view book