Hi Paul, This is better than _The God in the Tree_, and not because the second chapter situation is familiar to me (I worked in Crisis Intervention with kids in care -- most of them young offenders -- back in the nineties). No, it's because I feel your third person PoV has more voice than the fir... view book

I have two children, aged nine and eleven, who I know would love this book with illustrations and activities -- perhaps a kind of Horrible History type format? The voice of the book seems informative and easy to read, not condescending at all, and is very engaging. Seems a shame that this age-gr... view book

Urg, one more thing, sorry Sye. If the narrative in the second section is from the Horseman, then this (I believe) is where you are gaining confusion from some of your readers with the PoV issue. His 'voice', you see, is completely different in each of the two sections. The fragments have stoppe... view book

Hi Sye, I watchlisted this quite a while back -- too long ago -- and so must apologise for the length of time it's taken me to comment. I read as a reader until I'm dropped out of the story and the _writer_ in me kicks in; and, saying that, I'm afraid that the writer kicked in pretty early on... view book

*****I'm new to the site and first time author. Would appreciate you taking a look at my book, Turnabout by Bruce Kaler. Its a medical mystery thriller. Many thanks. Look forward to your comments.***** Sure, as soon as I see your bookshelf full. :-)) view book