Okay tense is perfect, punctuation perfect. Otherwise stiff, boring and this type of premise relates to the 60's and 70's when it was original, now,just outdated. Please try to be original next time, and have more fluid speech. The whole book just seems.....jerky. So sorry. view book

The story has an intersteing premis. view book

The imagination used here is very much to my liking. It is my kind of story ;-). The word crafting is exquisit. I feal however that this either verges on, or is litterary fiction, and fantasy combine. Personally I am more into commercial fantasy, but that's just me. This has definate odes of Shakesp... view book

A spectacular psychological thriller, keeps you guessing, and draws you into the story so deaply that you start to empathise with the main character. ;-). Marvelous work! view book

It ios extremely difficult to write an interesting story about a hair salon, but you got it right. The only other one I can think of is Shampoo. Well done! view book