I'm going to agree with Fred's comments below. Your story is great and I've enjoyed reading what I have so far. I'll definitely keep reading more. The writing does need tightening. I found myself tripping over excess adverbs and adjectives that felt empty. ex: 'Sighing against the heat, she slippe... view book

This is just my kind of story. I love the plot and your writing. I'm backing it and will return to read more. As a whole, you drew me in and I didn't doubt the world you put me in EXCEPT in CH1 when he starts playing with the Rubric's Cube. Is it just me? Perhaps. That totally pulled me out and mad... view book

Great premise, great hook. I'm immediately soaked into your characters. I'm adding this to my bookshelf and will read through when I have more time. Excellent execution, great wit. Well done! view book