Hi Christopher, I'll update my comments as I read more. C1 - I really like this first chapter. There are some nice hints to place it in the 70's and it was a good introduction to the family and some of their dynamics. I think you captured the sense of shock and fear of the news of the blasts a... view book

Hi Warrick, I'm returning your read from some time ago. Pitch is interesting, I like the idea. I read C1 and C2. I think you are over-explaining things as it reads at the moment. Some examples of this: - The first two paragraphs of C1 - do we need this info now or is it something we can l... view book

Four chapters in: I really like the cover. Long pitch – first para doesn’t read well – I thought Chris, Lynda and Shannon had absconded with a fourth character – then realised in the third para that Shannon was the teenager. The fourth para doesn’t read well to me and I wonder if you need it at ... view book

I read the first two chapters. I like the short pitch and long pitch - they made me feel I wanted to open the book and start reading. C.1 - I didn't feel an emotional connection to the characters. For me it felt strange to read of a terrible accident without feeling empathy for those affected by ... view book

Hi Caroline, I started reading with the expectation that I would probably read a couple of chapters - not my kind of thing, I thought. I read the bloomin' lot. I don't think I like Daisy and Xander, they are self-indulgent and quite odious...and yet...somehow I found them utterly fascinating. I'm... view book