Good story and well written. One comment-you need a comma when using a name in dialog. "Are you getting this, Teevan?! Euphemus view book

Wanda, your storyline is good, but your layout of the prose is wrong. each new item of dialogue must start on a new line, and have the occasional'he said'or 'she answerted' etc. It's hard to reaf and understand when it all runs together. Punctuation and the formal aspect of the book page is import... view book

Eric, Hi. Your book is well written and has a lot of very descriptive information, but it is a bit slow. I think you need the hanging body to be found much earlier and to create some suspense about the death. Same about the affair. Bring it in to capture the reader and make him read on, find out wh... view book

David, your appeal manager asked me to readf your book with the promise of a return. I have read 7 chapters. Seven very seperate, very isolated chapters with no connecting plot or ongoing intetrest. It is also all descriptive and lacking good meaningful dialog between characters to characterise th... view book

I already backed you and left a message. Come on Edward, kep up! Regards David (Flawless Murder) Will appreciate your response. view book