This is so good - my favourite book on this site. I wish it was published, I'd buy it today! Sort of reminds me of Guitar Girl...! Will definately be reading more, Shona view book

I love your style - it's very professional and your prose reads so well - you've got good pace. You've got a good story- telling voice. I also think that your characters are believable. For a change, I don't think I have much criticism to give! Shelved, Shona view book

Hiya Your style reads so professionally, I feel like I'm reading something that's already published. There's something confident in your style which gives this impression - it's really good. I also like your dialogue - it's convincing. The detail you provide in your writing gives the your work a re... view book

Hi! i like your style - it's natural and therefore easy to read. Also, love the pitch! This is one of the first books on this site i have read for a while that is able to combine third person and a protagonists personal thoughts. Well done! Shona view book

Interesting idea - contemporary and relevant. Constructive criticism: found the first line a little convoluted. Also wonder if paragraphing needs a little work; some are quite long. The idea is different though and so I think it does make this story stand out on this site. Shona view book