Hi Charlotte, There’s vivid characterisation here, and I’m drawn into the story because of that. Some will no doubt slate you for having a slow start, but I think this fits well with (a) the genre; and (b) the atmosphere of sorrow and regret you’re trying (very successfully) to create in ch1. ... view book

Janine, Yep, it’s enjoyable. Since this is already published there’s no point in me picking up on typos, so I didn’t look hard – actually, I can’t recall meeting more than one or two. This is a good story – characters are coming together (but with only 3 chapters read it’s hard to really say...lo... view book

Colin, As I read your pitch, I couldn’t help asking myself ‘why?’ – why does Eddy want revenge on Darryl? What’s he done to Eddy – apart from the ‘boastful successes’ and taking his parents’ attentions? And why is Eddy running, and from whom? See, in pitting two forces together that will clash un... view book

John, Creepy, but not overly - just how I like 'em! You set up the story really well in these openers, intro of the characters is smooth as silk - very professional. Only have time for the first three, but I can feel this tugging at me from the deep...I'll be back for more. Meantime - backed. Bes... view book

Alan, Moves along nicely, this one. The pitch is enough to get my juices flowing, but you continue with the action and live up to every promise. Good work. Backed. Best of luck, --JackR view book