Hi Henry! There's a lot to recommend your book, elements that if worked on can be made into a very good story. They're all there. The problem I found is the pacing. Your first chapter, for example, covers so many things, all interesting, and as a reader I'd like to know more about them. But it seems... view book

Hi Ian! I like the whole devil-dogs episode at the beginning. Suitably intriguing, mysterious, and scary. It sets the tone off nicely for the story. Well done! The thing I found a bit jarring was the very first few lines. How could Dylan know what was being said if he, as he admits, didn't hear and ... view book

Hi Valentina! Cute story. Not my usual read, of course, but I really thought you had a good hook with the horse backdrop. You really made the horses characters in the story, giving it authenticity. Well done! I like both Shane and Chloe as characters, and I also like how they met. That's so importan... view book

Hi Dave! What I like about your book is your ability to make your characters come alive and seem real, whether they're Colin or a hologram. Well done! There's a lot of humour in the telling, here, so that kept my interest, even though SciFi doesn't normally do anything for me. That's the great thing... view book

Hi B! I found your story to be rich and intriguing. There's so much here that makes this an interesting and worthwhile read. All the elements are there for a great book. My only concern is the unorthodox way in which you render dialogue. The dialogue, itself, is good, but in the theatrical style you... view book