Hi Orma, I like your pitch and your opening chapter. You have a good sense of how to set your scenes and switch between points of view, and your pacing seems good so far. You do a good job describing your characters and developing their unique attributes. You could improve this manuscript dram... view book

Ivan, your love of the language comes through clearly in THE BEHOLDER, which is full of interesting word choices and expressions. Your profile suggests that you're a non-native English speaker, and so I think it's impressive that you have such a command of the language. However, I think the rich ... view book

I think your short pitch is great. I'm really into historical fiction, and this sounds like an exciting setup. I think your long pitch is interesting, too, although it seems more like the beginning of a scene than a synopsis. However, people have different tastes in such things, and I thought the se... view book

An intriguing pitch! The vivid, action-packed prologue kept me hooked from start to finish. Promises to be a page-turner. view book

Hi Carol, I think readers of fantasy will be delighted with the world we glimpse in this first chapter of your book THE LORESTONE. There's a lot of beautiful descriptive language here, and you've clearly done the hard work of creating a rich world history and interesting character backstories. ... view book