This book, and this author, deserve to be on the top of the charts. view book

The bible has some very odd stuff. I didn't believe "the hairy ones" till I looked it up!!!!?? It was better for close up work though. - great line. It's the blade that matters... retrieved it.... turned it. Something worried me there. Is there a way to do with a few less words? The similar s... view book

I backed MH earlier on the grounds that it had no speech marks. Sorry. Childish of me. I’ve had another look. First impression is it’s good but can definitely get leaner. “Suddenly the scanner squawked.” Adds nothing. Suddenly is always a risky word. Not convinced you need so much back stor... view book

This looks ambitious and interesting, and you nearly got me. I think the reason you didn’t is the writing. I just got hung up on the sentences a few times. Here’s an example. “Mathew Whistler was what your Grandfather would call a ne’er do well, and he often still does, even now.” Let’s not ca... view book

This took me back, with pleasure, to some childhood reading I did about the crusades and things. Knight Crusader is a book I remember. Had a similar tone. There’s always polishing to be done. I think there’s a comma missing in your first paragraph. And there are always words that can be cut. I’d ... view book