Okay, six chapters in and enjoying myself. I want to finish all ten chapters posted here before commenting in more depth. I like the world you have built here and already have my favourite characters. As I say more to come when I finish reading. For nw, you've just bumped someone off my shelf. view book

I have read the first three chapters and I hav rated your book. Although I enjoyed the story in itself, I thought that perhaps you could have made it a bit more pacy in order to draw the reader in more. As an example, you start well with the prologue and there is a menacing feel to the introduction ... view book

I'm enjoying this and thought I'd drop you a comment whilst I read. My kind of book. I tend to forget about typos if I'm enjoying myself, which I am. More comments to follow as I read on. On my brand new shelf view book

Thanks for the comments and on the typos, as mentioned before, Leftenant is one of a few deliberate spellings and as such not a real typo. This novel is set in a broken future, hence the mix of technology and Dark Magic. I will add your other comments into the mix for my next re-write. Cheers... view book

I found this is an interesting premise which promises a strong story, however there is a problem which affects the flow and pace. I notice that you say you write with a quill and then you get it transferred to PC by your wife? Somewhere in that translation, and I have had similar problems with conve... view book