Gripping introduction scene in the hospital. You also get us to identify with your character well. I feel her panic, as she wakes not sure whether she can see, or speak and being uncertain of who she is. The sense of panic is conveyed well and it makes me want to read onto chapter one. There’s a n... view book

An intriguing pitch, which starts with a question – as all good books do. I can imagine a young boy asking their parents precisely the question as to where the dead birds go. First line gripped me. Wherever I was it smelled of pee. This is pitch-perfect for your intended audience. You build the su... view book

You'v set this up with some excellent realistic characters and some good tension between them. I instantly identified with Saira - how often parents uproot their kids without thinking about the consequences this has on them. I remember when mine moved out of my childhood home. I was 14 years old and... view book

Great pitch and your first chapter certainly doesn't disappoint. I love the last sentence of the second chapter, which compelled me to read on. Backing this and will be back for more. view book

I confess, when I read others comments on this and the pitch I was unconvinced. What a fool! This is a classic in the making. Looking forward to Jaye becoming a publisher and snapping it up, or HC. If they don't then it's genuinely their loss. Backed with pleasure. view book