Andy: I like your style of writing. You give us enough description and back story to fill in the scenes and details, but not so much that the narrative stops flowing. Though this is probably not the genre of back I'd pick up, I was interested in the characters and where you were going with them. ... view book

Main character has great voice, and the dialogue is spot on 'geek talk'. I found the first chapter funny and dark, and the lead up to the second chapter had nice suspense. Really reminded me in chap 1 of Catcher in the Rye with the strong protagonist voice and his pessimism. Not sure that was intent... view book

Wow, really great stuff! I loved the prologue--you do a fantastic job of giving the reader a broad sense of the major events without getting bogged down with all the 'history'. Chapter one also reads really well--I love how you start off by just dropping us into the scene. There are far too many wri... view book

Very intriguing premise and first chapter. The narrator has great voice, and I want to discover more about the whole lizard shape changing thing. Weird and funny. If you get a chance, please consider taking a look at my book. Thanks! Mike Vasich "Loki" view book

Holly: Good dialogue overall. Chapter one could really benefit from some revising, in particular, trimming away some unnecessary stuff. Like some other young writers, you give a brief 'intro' to characters when you introduce them, and this is not always necessary or desirable. A small nitpick--... view book