I like the premise very much and the structure is good. But I'm not engaged. It reads a bit like an essay, too much tell, not enough show. A lot of 'ly' words, an overuse of the word 'suddenly'. Disappointing but with work, this could be a treasure. view book

A bit clunky but engaged me quite quickly. Premise is great but there are a lot of similar plots out there, especially in this genre (I know, I've read most of them). I'll continue to read because I want to know what happens next. I think you should regard that as a positive comment. view book

The first chapter gripped me, the second chapter didn't. which is a shame The monkey was an annoying distraction at first but I can see that it's an important mechanism to demonstrate Zoe's drug usage. I'm an avid reader of this genre and I think Zane rivals any psycho ever written about by the grea... view book

I've just started reading this, the subject matter was what drew me in originally. Honestly, it's a bit over descriptive for my usual tastes, some paragraphs go into way too much abstract detail. You succeed in creating an image in my head with enviable ease ....and then you go and over-ice it, whic... view book