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Not much to say, really. Well, if you want to know the truth, I have a BS in chemistry, and I must say that the resulting frustration is the reason I wrote my first book.

Know that I'm in this for the comments more than the backing, so as of now, I will only read yours if you either comment on mine (as I usually only come on if I receive notice that someone has commented) or offer a read-swap, which I'll gladly escape. I will ignore anyone who spams out messages to people or backs without commenting (or at least letting me know you intend to).

When I comment, I try to make it useful for the writer, although some books are good enough that I can't think of anything to say. I don't automatically back a book, but I will support anything I like or I think will be successful, even if it isn't for me. But don't go messaging me if I didn't back the book demanding me to "pay the toll" (someone's actual words). If I didn't back it, it's because it didn't meet either of the above standards. Honestly, I don't think this is too much to ask.

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Long Gone

 

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Long Gone

J E Fritz

At 12:00 p.m. Carolyn Kramer was vacuuming her house. Four hours later, her car, purse and cell phone were still there, but she was gone.


Middle-aged housewife Carolyn Kramer disappears one afternoon, leaving behind no clue as to where she went. Detective Bart Pulaski is called in to find her, but even after combing through every sorted detail of her life and investigating numerous leads, he is left with a case that seems unsolvable and a family shattered by the loss of a wife and mother.


What happened to Carolyn? Was she the victim of a serial murderer? Did she leave on her own? Is her husband lying about being out of town?


Long Gone is a crime-mystery novel about obsession, darkness, and the malleable nature of perception. Complete at 68,000 words.


Questions readers can answer for me in the comments section:
1. Does the shifting perspective work? Would third person be better?
2. Is it too repetitious?
3. How is the pacing?
4. Does everything that happens make sense?

 

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Daniel Delacy wrote 28 days ago

Care to swap reads? :o)

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soutexmex wrote 110 days ago

I commented/backed your book 78 days ago - though my book has been on....

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I wrote 173 days ago

Your writing really displays a lot of emotion. I'm not just reading it, I'm feeling it. My only suggestion is to trim back some of the paragraphs. You have a lot of chapters that are almost entirely made up of telling things that happened. So much can be overwhelming for readers. Other than tha... view book

I wrote 182 days ago

I really enjoyed reading your book and wish you had more than three chapters posted. The story is well-written and interesting and in my opinion, would be a great success. The only thing that bothered me at all was that I assume this story is supposed to take place in the US (what with a Congressm... view book

I wrote 186 days ago

All I can say is I'm sorry I didn't get to this sooner. You are quite good at making the reader feel what is going on and I can see why you're on the desk. Belated backing. view book

I wrote 186 days ago

Very well written. It's detailed, enjoyable, and easy to get into. I'll wish you luck that you stay on the shelf for the next few hours, although I don't think you need it. view book

I wrote 188 days ago

A good, suspenseful book, but you seem to use a lot of -ing words and I've heard that is not well regarded among agencies and publishers. Supposedly, it distances the reader from the character while an active verb engages him or her (for example, say "he ran" instead of "he was running"). Good luc... view book

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