Dawn, Okay, right off the bat I loved the poems. Don't get rid of them please... You have a very lyrical way about your writing that brought me in at the begining and then put me to sleep. I had a hard time staying focused on the story and what it was going to be about in the first chapter. Ma... view book

Now, I am just thinking out load here...I love the story. I think once you get going it's great. I felt that chapter 1 was more like blocking on a stage, then telling me the story. I think you need to rewrite that differently. Same information...just present it from your main characters point of vie... view book

This is a fun book and it's great as a kids book. Cute ideas and very creative...I personally would like to see you set your stage abit more to explain this world at the begining. Why it wasn't right?...I also found that the idea of a tower in trees was rather vague. Give me more... I love what y... view book

Love your style...quick, catchy, and it moves just as it should. Bravo! I have only begun reading the begining, but I'm hooked. view book