I love the dream-like feeling of reading this. I think it comes from the present tense, which is at once involving and beguiling. It does mean some adjustment is needed, but I'm a veteran of Katherine Kerr's sci-fi writing so I got along well enough with it. You have an intriguing story here. I ... view book

I love your tone, and the dry wit of Jake's inner monologue instantly drew me into his story. Coupled with some intelligent analogies, this served to force me to read through the entire first chapter :-) You have a very natural storytelling style and I foresee this one going somewhere very quickly... view book

Got to love your opening; it's witty and clever and immediately makes one want to read more. As openers go, it's pretty much perfect. I also admire your closing line to the first chapter; a wonderful twist on 'little did he know'. As for Luke's work environment of petty politics and ridiculous, i... view book

You have a very involving tone through the first chapter; it's insular, and I experienced the story very much from inside Grogan's head. This contrasted well with the narrative of the prologue, which was more onservational. I think you have a very strong read here, and I'll look forward to reading... view book

Jim, now this is my kind of writing; plenty of scene-setting detail without any hint of boredom (some people think you need low word counts to maintain pace, but they're wrong!). I found this totally engrossing, and will certainly be reading more than just the first chapter. If I'm being mega-pi... view book