By the end of the chapter I was more than fully aware that the MC's name was "Old Raymond", or was that your way of describing him, a seventy-year-old who had not quite reached "middle-age"? Passive structure, vague descriptions, I felt I was walking along a white corridor, with white walls and a w... view book

Have you (self) published this shit yet, what's the isbn number? view book

What a nice, sad story, I think children would like to read your stories. Your style is a little unusual, especially the dialogue, I thought someone else was speaking, then I saw it was a pause between sentences. I suggest you look at the way other authors write their dialogue. I see you have bac... view book

Hello, my name is Annette, Mr van de Locht (my uncle) has given up his site to me, as he has to work on his novel, with my cousin. I like your book and I hope it gets printed, as I wish to read the whole thing on paper. I hate reading from a flat screen, it's not the same is it? Your character ... view book

I like what you write, your words make sense, even to someone as thick as me. I got to chapter six, I had to stop as I'm pressed for time. I would like you to take a look at my characters, but I think you would find them rather thin and shallow, well some of them are, but wait until I edit, I ha... view book