He wakes up in the land of Streel, where the Freel has rule........The Freel from Steel, sounded a bit ‘Once Upon A Time’ to me. I was looking for a truth about life, but it seemed that I was, as a product of being me, the outside. (read this out loud, what are you saying/?) Is this it:- ... view book

Groaner I found the word 'that' in quite a few places where I think you would have been better off without it. You might not care? I didn't see the point of highlighting grammar inconsistencies, because you are writing with a conversational voice, which I suspect is your own. This is obviously how... view book

JS Do you think you need the word ‘however’ as often as you use it? At the time, however, I had no idea who Jessica Tandy...... At the time, I had no idea who Jessica Tandy In spite of my concerns, however, on Tuesday, February 4th, 1989,..... In spite of my concerns, on Tuesday, February ... view book

Alice I enjoyed the read. This is what I call 'social history' ... history of a society and how they lived, and is undoubtedly very interesting. There are two ways of looking at this...The first is on a personal level. This is a fabulous heirloom to leave behind for future generations. ... view book

Dan Well written, descriptive and conjures vivid imagery, even for me reading out of genre, which is a credit to you. Rarely do you need the word had preceding an – ed verb:- the plan he had submitted for approval the plan he submitted for approval. In mid-June the head of Ceausescu’s ... view book