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Bob Pickup

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Hi. I thought i'd give this a try as to be honest although i had a few short stories published in short lived fanzines when i was a lot younger, i've never got around to trying a full length novel. I drive trains for a living and running dialogues and storylines through my mind, help me to concentrate, believe it or not. I've never really had the time to donate to full-time writing and it's something I've always wanted to have a bash at.
I do have the full draft of this novel written out, but haven't had the time yet to do a full re-write on the rest of it.
All I really want off you guys is an honest opinion as to what you think of it. Don't be shy ... I can take constructive criticism and I can use it :).

I don't do platitudes, ego-stroking or back-scratching.
If i like a book and can't see any faults, then i will shelve it without leaving a comment.
If i like a book and see a few problems then i will shelve it and leave a comment.
If i don't like a book then i may leave a comment as to why, or i will simply move on.
I'm not here to play the game, i'm here to help improve my skills as a writer and the quality of my work.

I am working on a new project which I hope to upload soon

Thank you.

Bob

favourite books

Iain.M. Banks (Most of his books)
Michael Moorcock (Nearly all of his books, especially his Eternal Champion series)
Lots more, but can't think of any at the moment. Will add more later.

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Troubled Minds Saga: Grace

Bob Pickup

Ben thinks he knows Grace's secret. But the deeper he digs, the darker it gets ~ and what he knew paled in comparision.


Ben is an undercover troubleshooter for the Empire's A-mind Rehabilitation Facility. He is sent to investigate Grace, who is an A-mind ( Artificial Intelligence) aboard an Explorer class spaceship.
It doesn't take Ben long to discover that Grace has some serious behavioral problems, so he has her committed to the Rehabilitation Facility.
From then on Ben's life changes forever. Using her wealth and powerful contacts, Grace manipulates Ben into accompanying her on her 6-month post re-hab tour. Resentful and fearing her vengence at first, Ben gradually comes to realise that there is a lot more to Grace than anyone had ever suspected.
After an almost catastrophic encounter with space pirates, Grace starts behaving very strangely. Together with Erica, Ben starts to join together all the little pieces that he has gathered during the journey.
Only then, does he begin to realise that the secret behind Grace's very origins could bring about the fall of the Empire.
All this and not a laser beam in sight. Well maybe one or two. Just to move the story along a bit, you understand.

 

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Casimir Greenfield wrote 6 days ago

Hi Bob - just extending the hand of friendship. I'm still fairly ....

Cara Gold wrote 7 days ago

Aw yeah I understand what you mean with the lack of time! Same case w....

Cara Gold wrote 7 days ago

Wow Bob! Thanks so much for the support, I really appreciate it! I a....

The Knowledge wrote 7 days ago

Hi Bob, My book is simply called ‘Madeline’ (Link below) She has st....

ShadowOfOsiris wrote 23 days ago

Hi Bob You commented on my book, Shadow of the Wraith, some time a....

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I wrote 1071 days ago

This is fun. You've captured the small-town hack very well and the total disrespect nearly all teenagers have for their elders nowadays..... and a monster thats throws subs around.... Good story matey ... Can't remember if i've already backed it ....but will pop it on shelf as soon as i am able :)... view book

I wrote 1091 days ago

Don't know what i was expecting but it certainly wasn't this..... has me hooked and will read some more ...is the nasty geist in the house? or has it possessed the girl Mary? ...want to shelve this but due to bug i can't at the moment....will do as soon as i can ... Bob view book

I wrote 1096 days ago

Note to self .....places to split chap 4 :) ...thx Jim They’re not all perfect breaks (in that they might need a little work to make them flow, but places that might do the trick to my mind are immediately after the words: “As if on cue, an irritated voice came from the doorway.” OR “Is that... view book

I wrote 1117 days ago

I would have to agree with those who have commented before. your descriptive narrative is awesome and the visuals you create make me green with envy. This is far better than anything i could write. But it is too slow ...almost Tolkienesque in its execution. Can't help but feel you will lose readers ... view book

I wrote 1118 days ago

Hi matey ......read chapter one and will be back for more Only spotted one thing ....section when introducing Penny ....para 6 you spell Pennt ....instead of Penny :) Back soon bob view book

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