Ch 2 is just as good. Glad I backed it. Two things though: Jock's 'podgy' hand? Is it supposed to be pudgy or is this a Britishism I don't know? 'Spelman revelled in the fact of his emerging ...' You call him Helman everywhere else. I'll be back for the next chapter later. Tru view book

LOL! I actually did laugh out loud twice, three times if you count the one while I was reading your blurb. And I only got through the first chapter (karate class is calling). Are you channeling Douglas Addams? No, too female. Either way, I'm shelving this one. Tru view book

Man, that Martha is one messed up nut job, and that's the nicest thing I could think to say. Are we going to find out how she got this way? I hope you're not going to leave those years she was missing hanging... Anyway, there were a few typos in the new chapters but I was too busy reading to note... view book

Crispy - no criticism this time, I was too into it to notice if there were any rough spots. One thought though-it would be nice to cut back to Martha again every once in a while, to help balance the story. You had a scene with her right after Em and Dieter took off, but we haven't actually seen he... view book

Sorry it took me so long to get over here. I didn't have time to read much, but I jotted some notes: Alicia waited a few more minutes before undressing and keeping her shirt on. -- Is she undressing or not? Is she removing a coat? This doesn't make sense to me. ...Alicia looking at him worr... view book