This has promise and really deserves to be published. You have a wonderful voice that flows beautifuly, quite a contrast when compared to the story you tell. I love that. Your characters and dialogue are perfect. You have an excellent mind for writing lines that stick. I'm going to back this and rea... view book

It's dark and i can barley see the keyboard so forgive me if this comment is a little short! First of all- great opening, i loved your first sentence. There are a few clichéd sentences, i'm sure this has been mentioned before though, You seem to really have a knack for story telling, i thorough... view book

I enjoyed what I read of this. It's very lyrical and atmospheric, definatley something i would buy myself if it were published, which i hope it will be. I loved everything about this. view book

Well... this wasn't what I was expected. Never-the-less i was pleasantly surprised. I have read my way through the first chapter and I particularly liked the opening dialogue between the two characters. Excellent. In a way some of this reads as if it should be whispered if read aloud, i'm not... view book

Straight away this reminded me of terry brooks, although i'm not sure why... I've only had time to read the first chapter of this so I will comment on that... I like this very much although I do agree that some of your dialogue is a tad confusing. I think you should follow the critiques of JRT... view book