Hello Lori! Your pitch interested me and I decided to read the story. I like how you started off with the dream because it grabbed my attention. I have only read the first three chapters, but I felt that it was well-written and has good description. Some suggestions I have: Chapter 1 ... view book

Hello Selena! Your pitch grabbed my attention. I would just suggest separating your pitch into several paragraphs so that it is easier to read and the reader will be able to catch the key points more easily. Your writing is descriptive and the story is written well. You have an interesting p... view book

Hello Janene! Sorry I didn't comment when I backed! I was short on time. But on with the comment... Your pitch is amazingly written. That alone captured my attention. I loved reading this. You have written a great narrative and it was fun to read. Your main female character has a strong pers... view book

Hello :-) Interesting story. Fantastic narrative. You definitely pulled me in even with just your pitch (which I would suggest to break up into a couple paragraphs to be easier to read and catch the key points). Just like the reviewer below me I would say you have a nice balance between showing ... view book

Hello Hanna! Wow your prologue was exceptionally well-written. I just got pulled in by your words and the imagery. I haven't finished reading but I definitely will. I noticed that you wrote "petit" when it should be "petite". That was the only nitpick I had. Fantastic job! Backed. view book