The Room by Gavin Bell

Rear Window on the internet. With a twist.

Steve, an incapacitated architect in a deadend relationship, whiles away the hours on internet chat rooms. One day he discovers a fascinating self-help group called 'The Room' whose members are almost religious in their devotion to the group. Some innocent voyeurism takes a darker turn when one of the members of The Room confesses to a murder. What Steve does with the information will create a spiral of horror he is powerless to escape...

A dark psychological thriller, The Room is a screenplay you won't forget.

  • Classification: Moderate
  • Work is: Fully available on Authonomy
  • First submitted Aug. 27, 2008
  • Last updated Aug. 27, 2008
The Room
  • Read 1 time
  • On 0 bookshelves
  • 16 comments
Report

Recent readers

Readers also like

Comments

To rate or comment on this or any book please Register or Log in

  • Retired user
    Sarah Parish [Retired] wrote 2 years, 9 months ago
    Hi Gavin, I've read the first act and I really like this. This is only the second screenplay I've read so I'm not entirely sure how they work, but I found this easy to read and to visualise. I did find it a bit slow to start with, but I think when it translates to the screen each scene would come to life much more quickly because you don't have to read the description. This is more likely my lack ...
    Read more
  • Citizen Gav's avatar
    Citizen Gav Author wrote 6 years, 10 months ago

    Thanks for the links Anne!

    I've split the script into three 'acts' - hopefully that'll make it a bit easier to read.

  • Annie's avatar
    Annie wrote 6 years, 10 months ago

    http://www.bbc.co.uk/writersroom/

    Look this up... You can submit scripts for the BBC

    anne

  • Annie's avatar
    Annie wrote 6 years, 10 months ago

    www.writersmarket.com

    www.writers-editors.com

    www.bbc.co.uk/radio4/arts/commissioning.shtml

    These should help. The last one is for radio 4. It may be good to get on to them.

  • Citizen Gav's avatar
    Citizen Gav Author wrote 6 years, 11 months ago
    Thanks Annie that's really nice to hear! Good point about the difficulty of reading, I'll see if I can break it up a bit over the weekend to make it a bit more digestable... To be honest I haven't really tried sending it out. I sent a copy to a director aquaintance a couple of years ago, but he never got back to me. I was recently at a Q&A with the comic book writer Mark Millar and he advised ...
    Read more
  • Annie's avatar
    Annie wrote 6 years, 11 months ago
    This is really good. I've read part of it, but obviously cannot finish all of it in one go. Is there a chance you could break it up a bit? Maybe putting the first page into scenes? This will give the reader a sort of book mark to come back to. I don't know if I'll remember where I stopped when I return again, because it's all on one page. I love the way you write. Your story is so ...
    Read more
  • Annie's avatar
    Annie wrote 6 years, 11 months ago

    OOhh, this sounds nice. I will certainly be back to read it when I have more time. If the screenplay lives up the pitch, we're in for a good ride.

    best
    anne

  • Citizen Gav's avatar
    Citizen Gav Author wrote 6 years, 11 months ago

    Hi Mackenzie

    It's around 80 pages, so going by the page-per-minute rule it's around 80 minutes. I reckon if it was filmed it might run a little longer as it's potentially heavier on atmosphere than dialogue. Thanks and hope you enjoy it!

  • Citizen Gav's avatar
    Citizen Gav Author wrote 7 years ago
    David - Thanks, I had a feeling it might be a bit too instructive, but it's the first time I'd tried writing a full script and all the actor directions was probably my inner control-freak coming out. It is finished (in draft form, anyway) and is about 80 pages. Going by the page-per-minute rule, I think that's about right for a low-budget thriller. I hadn't thought about what kind of movie it could be, but I always thought it would ...
    Read more
  • Citizen Gav's avatar
    Citizen Gav Author wrote 7 years ago
    Hi David Thanks, I had a feeling it might be a bit too instructive, but it's the first time I'd tried writing a full script and all the actor directions was probably my inner control-freak coming out. It is finished (in draft form, anyway) and is about 80 pages. Going by the page-per-minute rule, I think that's about right for a low-budget thriller. I hadn't thought about what kind of movie it could be, but I always thought it would ...
    Read more
  • James E's avatar
    James E wrote 7 years ago
    Hmmm, I was sure I saved a comment on here this morning but obviously not. Now what did I say? Essentially, I started by saying I know little about script-writing, but your pitch sounded good (I like Rear Window) and the idea of an updated Hitchcock style story around chat rooms seemed good. The plot was generally good, and I confress I didn't predict the twist. I did find it a bit slow at the start, but this may be ...
    Read more
  • David C's avatar
    David C wrote 7 years ago
    Hello Gavin: i've written many a screenplay so I'll be taking a good look at yours very soon. Just a cursory look and I feel you don't need so many actors instructions under the dialogue Use these sparingly. We seem to have similar tastes. I'll put this on my Watchlist and move it up when I have space on the Bookshelf. I'd always appreciate a reciprocal gesture but especially any comments you have to make about my book. Is this ...
    Read more
  • Citizen Gav's avatar
    Citizen Gav Author wrote 7 years ago

    Thanks for the feedback, guys! I'm also working on a 'real' book, but this is the most substantial thing I've completed, so thought it would be good to put it up here. I'll be interested to look at some of the other books on here as soon as I get a minute.

    PS thanks for letting me know about the mistake Cindy!

  • Retired user
    Cindy Bias [Retired] wrote 7 years ago

    P.S.

    Gavin, I just noticed, too, that in your pitch you wrote "Chris" instead of "Steve."

    Cindy

  • Retired user
    Cindy Bias [Retired] wrote 7 years ago
    Gavin, Always learning. This is the first screen play that I've ever read. It was your pitch that attracted me, so you know, a good one. My point--I can't offer any comments of real substance since screen plays are beyond me, but I very much liked the Hitchcock factor. The only questionable thing that jumped out at me was Steve's last line; I get it, of course, and appreciate the tie back to the beginning, but considering all that went ...
    Read more
  • Sam Hackett's avatar
    Sam Hackett wrote 7 years ago

    I share your choice in books Gavin, and your views on stories, plus from what I've read so far of The Room I'm intrigued, so much I've added it to my Watchlist. Keep writing and reading, sure you will. Enjoy the day, Sam.