Bright Eyes by Ayana Raine

This time, it's different. I'm not a scared little girl anymore. And he's bitten off more than he can chew.

My name is Savannah Ashton and I've never been normal. Not since I was nine years old and bitten by a wolf anyway. I thought I was the only other one of my kind for eight years. Well, guess again.

Moving to London changed everything. Meeting Cassius and Lucas on that first day sealed my fate forever. And the unexplainable pull I’m feeling towards Cassius? It’s only complicating everything more.

But finally I thought I’d found a real home again and friends. That is until someone from my past decides to pay me a visit. And he's not content on taking just a bite now. This time though, I'm not a scared little girl anymore. And he's bitten off more then he can chew.

***Note***: I'm taking a slight break from Authonomy while I try to edit Bright Eyes. I know a few of you are really looking forward to the rest so I'll try and hurry. I'm going to be uploading fairly soon, I just need to make sure everything makes sense first :) Thanks for all the support, you guys are amazing!

  • Classification: Universal
  • Work is: Extract only on Authonomy
  • First submitted Sept. 15, 2009
  • Last updated Sept. 15, 2009
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  • GroFoster's avatar
    GroFoster wrote 1 year, 5 months ago

    Loved it!

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    Seringapatam wrote 2 years, 1 month ago
    Ayana, I have to agree with the comments below. What a class piece of writing this is. I was drawn in from an early stage. It is a cracking story with great descriptions, nice flow and pace and a good future ahead of it I would guess. Sorry this isnt a critiques, but just how I felt after reading three chapters. Brilliant. Sean Connolly. British Army on the Rampage. (B.A.O.R) Please consider me for a read or watch list wont ...
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  • IKIRA's avatar
    IKIRA wrote 2 years, 2 months ago

    That was an awsome work can't wait to get to the bottom of the story

  • samoana75's avatar
    samoana75 wrote 2 years, 8 months ago

    Hi! I thought I'd stop by to see if you've uploaded anything new as its been a while. However I have to just say that this is one of my favourite books in this genre on this site.

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    samoana75 wrote 2 years, 8 months ago

    I just thought I'd check to see if you had posted anything recently- its been a while but this is still one of my favourite books in this genre. Cheers!

  • Tod Schneider's avatar
    Tod Schneider wrote 2 years, 9 months ago
    I've taken a look at chapter one and I think this looks great! Your character is immediately interesting, and I imagine would be a hit with teen girls. Your descriptions and setting work well, and the dialog rings true. I did find some minor errata you could fix if you want, or ignore if you think I'm a numbskull: cut: "catching my reflection in the cafe window" as redundant. You already told us in the same paragraph. My eyes (misspelled: ...
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  • Ben2234's avatar
    Ben2234 wrote 2 years, 11 months ago

    Brilliant writing, brilliant story.

  • Kristen Lusk's avatar
    Kristen Lusk wrote 2 years, 12 months ago
    So, I put your book on my watchlist a few weeks ago. I finally got a chance to look at it today. I read to Chapter 20 of the 40 you posted. Then, I added your book to my shelf! :) I'm planning on finishing the rest tomorrow. Your book is such an easy read. The story is carried at a good pace, and I feel like I know Savannah. The only suggestion I have deals with her mother's accident. ...
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    J.S.Watts wrote 3 years, 3 months ago
    Love the short pitch! I wonder if the long pitch would be improved by being written in the third person? I’m not certain about the title because of the link to the Mike Batts/ Watership Down song “Bright Eyes”, but maybe that was intentional? Nice opening paragraph, hooking the reader in with promised secrets and oddities from the get-go. And this sense of oddness continues throughout the chapter. Nice one. I liked the father/daughter tension and thought it would go ...
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    Philthy wrote 3 years, 3 months ago
    Hi Ayana, I’m here for our read swap. Sorry it’s taken me so long. Below are my findings/comments. They are, of course, my humblest opinions, so take them for whatever they’re worth. Love the first line of your long pitch. Be careful about tense changes. Everything is past tense until “someone from my past decides to pay me a visit.” Be consistent. I’m no expert, but I think the short pitch and long pitches are supposed to work independently of ...
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  • LiamHumphreys's avatar
    LiamHumphreys wrote 3 years, 4 months ago

    absolutely love this. Three times i have read this and i still haven't got bored of it.
    The new chapters are amazing and i felt compelled to read the entire thing in one go. I love almost any book i read however only the ones i find absolutely amazing actually inspire me to keep writing and try and develop my own creation, and this is one of those. so thank you and please upload more :)

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    megirl232 wrote 3 years, 6 months ago

    Amazing read, i feel sorry for the people who dont get a chance to read this because ayana is an excellent writer and should soon have her books at the shops :)

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    megirl232 wrote 3 years, 6 months ago

    Amazing read, i feel sorry for the people who dont get a chance to read this because ayana is an excellent writer and should soon have her books at the shops :)

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    HanayakaKurome wrote 3 years, 6 months ago

    Yay! I'm finally able to find some free time and then I get the awesome surprise of this having been updated! Great job, yet again, and keep at it! This is one of the best books I've read on here so far! Kudos to you!

  • Luciana House's avatar
    Luciana House wrote 3 years, 7 months ago
    My tummy clenched with excitment whilst reading this, which is one of the things I love about reading the most. Savannah (beautiful name by the way) is a great character, and I knew within the first few paragraphs that I liked her a lot. You write in first person really well, and I don't actually think I have any criticisms :) This is remarkable, and I'm actually disappointed I can't read more at the moment. I wish I had a ...
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    mjps wrote 3 years, 7 months ago

    I will be back to read more of this book, it has me intrigued. Placed on my watchlist.

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    cats4 wrote 3 years, 7 months ago

    Ayana, 2 great new chapters, can't wait to read the rest. Just two errors to point out: ch 38 'And he's might kill...' should be 'And he might...' and in ch 39 you have a couple of instances of wearily, meaning tired, instead of warily, meaning alert. I'm looking forward to the rest,
    best wishes,
    Ashley

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    pandapple11 wrote 3 years, 8 months ago

    please upload soon!!! im addicted:)
    amazing story line by the way, wish there was more kissing, but it takes time and right moments i guess. Its just the romantic in me.

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    Cora B [Retired] wrote 3 years, 9 months ago
    Okay, I don't know where to start. I guess I should tell you that I devoured all 37 chapters in two days. It was like I couldn't control myself, and I just had to keep reading. That's what a book should be like. You made me laugh out loud, squeal with delight, and you had my heart pounding. If I had bought this book, there'd be no way I'd be disappointed. Savannah was perfect. I love that she's strong, and ...
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    monstermom wrote 3 years, 11 months ago

    Ok, you asked and here is the goss. I loved it. The flow the tension, the physical power that Savannah holds is tangible, you can feel the heat rising off her as she is lifting the weights and arguing with Cassius. There are some punctuation issues with the conversations in 35 and 36 but otherwise flawless. I still back it gladly.
    Thanks for adding the other chapters, keep up the story. I can't wait to see the rest.

    Rionach