All for the Little One by Katfather Timms

A Funny Journey through suburbia.. and beliefs

Have you ever had one of those days? You know, your cable turned off, your cat attacking you, being thrown off a horse, getting lost, attacked by a mad woman, being picked up by the police and mugged? No? Well what about the possiblity of tripping Gnomes, a mad witch, Ghosts, and something hiding in the shadows upstairs? No? Well, welcome to MY world..
Come take a stroll with me...You might learn something.. Come back here you coward!!

  • Classification: Universal
  • Work is: Fully available on Authonomy
  • First submitted Feb. 28, 2010
  • Last updated Feb. 28, 2010
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  • Katfather's avatar
    Katfather Author wrote 2 years, 5 months ago
    Excellent idea! I agree with you . I wrote that part in a hurry and always meant to change that, but forgot to.. I've since rewrote it. Check it out and thank you! [QUOTE] This rolls along swimmingly; good breezy style, and well written. Critique-wise there were just a couple things at the beginning I'd tinker with: reference to "tree truck" probably meant to be "tree trunk", and comparing the cat claws to an axe didn't seem spot on -- ...
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  • Tod Schneider's avatar
    Tod Schneider wrote 3 years ago

    This rolls along swimmingly; good breezy style, and well written. Critique-wise there were just a couple things at the beginning I'd tinker with: reference to "tree truck" probably meant to be "tree trunk", and comparing the cat claws to an axe didn't seem spot on -- maybe more like a wood chipper? But lots of fun overall. Best of luck with this!
    Tod
    http://authonomy.com/books/40646/the-lost-wink/

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    yasmin esack [Retired] wrote 4 years, 10 months ago

    Good enjoyable read. Light and entertaining

    backed the mind setter

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    Kittenkel wrote 4 years, 11 months ago
    This a lively, humorous, light read. I like your tone and thought the bit about being half dead by the time you reach Taco Bell was very amusing! As you're already aware, the text does need tidying up, and I'm not a fan of multiple exclamation or question marks. For me, I found the large amount of text in brackets weakened the impact of your writing as this is something you did a lot, and the points would read better ...
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    Lockjaw Lipssealed wrote 4 years, 11 months ago

    Pretty hard to read this without having a smile on my face!

    Lockjaw

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    Despinas1 wrote 4 years, 11 months ago

    Dear Katfather,
    All for the Little One....... nice work...... Actually great work.... I like the way you draw the reader with your short yet dynamic synopsis. Gives one the impression they need to delve into the story to get the full extent of all those questions. Best of luck with your work and much success
    Backed with pleasure
    Helen
    The Last Dream

  • Katfather's avatar
    Katfather Author wrote 4 years, 11 months ago

    [QUOTE] Sounds like my eldest's life. :) A fun and entertaining read. [ENDQUOTE]

    Thank you. Give my best to your eldest..poor thing..

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    Katfather Author wrote 4 years, 11 months ago
    [QUOTE] Fun stuff with great potential. What needs some work is your presentation. For example: The huge gaps between paras; random use of capital letters; elipses only ever come in threes (some of yours could be replaced with full stops and/or end dashes), and lastly you're a big fan of exclamation marks-- but most editors aren't. I know, I'm as guilty, I get nagged about this stuff it in my writing all the time at my writing group :-) Enjoyed ...
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    Jim Darcy wrote 4 years, 11 months ago

    Sounds like my eldest's life. :) A fun and entertaining read.

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    Andrew Burans wrote 4 years, 11 months ago

    You have written a very interesting, very funny and unique storyline, which I do like. Your musings and chaotic life kept a smile on my face for the whole time I was reading. The dialogue is realistic and well written and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

    Andrew Burans
    The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

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    M.H.Thonger [Retired] wrote 5 years, 1 month ago

    thoroughly enjoyable. hope it goes higher in the rankings. I've backed it. Please check out 'the compulsive adventurer' for travels around the world with a difference. Thanks Mike

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    Jan wrote 5 years, 1 month ago
    Fun stuff with great potential. What needs some work is your presentation. For example: The huge gaps between paras; random use of capital letters; elipses only ever come in threes (some of yours could be replaced with full stops and/or end dashes), and lastly you're a big fan of exclamation marks-- but most editors aren't. I know, I'm as guilty, I get nagged about this stuff it in my writing all the time at my writing group :-) Enjoyed the ...
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  • klouholmes's avatar
    klouholmes wrote 5 years, 1 month ago
    Hi Katfather, This is entertaining and it wound like a story from the spool. I wasn’t surprised when the narrator referred to his boyhood in Ireland and the stories there. But these scenes are real, going from one small catastrophe to the next. The part about the lack of sidewalks and the car situation – liked that because I walk a lot and neighborhoods like that are what you described. This has lively dialogue, funny metaphors and is fun to ...
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    DP Walker [Retired] wrote 5 years, 1 month ago

    Hi Katfather
    This is an interesting piece of work. The characters are real and down to earth and you develop them nicely. Very charming and extremely witty with some great one-liners.
    DP Walker
    Five Dares

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    A Knight wrote 5 years, 1 month ago

    Excellent cross-genre piece here. I think it all hangs on hte superb three-dimensional characterisation you portray: real, funny, vivid and believable.

    Backed with pleasure.
    Abi xxx

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    Katfather Author wrote 5 years, 1 month ago
    [QUOTE] LITTLE ONE This is a fun book to read. You’ve created a good character in Kat. She’s spunky and likable. Her day reminded me so much of many of my own I found myself laughing out loud. A good read, I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt). [ENDQUOTE] Uh, thank you, but I THINK I should tell you that ''Kat'' is short for KatFATHER, and I'm HIM. I'm sorry about the mixup, I make it a ...
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  • celticwriter's avatar
    celticwriter wrote 5 years, 1 month ago

    Hey there, Katfather...the more I take your journey, the more it captivates. Happy travels up the ladder!

    jim
    jack & charmian london

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    PATRICK BARRETT wrote 5 years, 1 month ago

    Very funny, there is some good comedy on here and you will join the ranks straight away. Congratulations and well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

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    soutexmex wrote 5 years, 1 month ago
    Welcome aboard, Katfather. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. I'm a bit of a pitch doctor, having read thousands of pitches in my time on this website, so I want to share my insight here with you. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. Both pitches work for this genre. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments ...
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    Burgio [Retired] wrote 5 years, 1 month ago

    LITTLE ONE
    This is a fun book to read. You’ve created a good character in Kat. She’s spunky and likable. Her day reminded me so much of many of my own I found myself laughing out loud. A good read, I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).